zankoku_na_tenshi

Another great chapter, yay! I'm really starting to like Aly's character, and the story has really drawn me in. ^_^ The two girls found a tree stump and Aly sat ...

Gah! Sorry for my lateness. *shame* That was a really good bit, gives us a chance to get to know a character who, up to now, has been relatively minor, ...

I do think next time, you might get more reveiws if you just posted one chapter, rather than two at once, but don't worry. It often takes time to get ...

Sorry I'm so late... *shame* I love the ending to the second chunk. It definitely gives a sense that something big is about to happen, I can't wait to find ...

I love this bit. It doesn't seem pointless at all. ^_^ It really made me smile, and the interaction between Eric and Sarah seemed very realistic. This part did a ...

Dang, he is getting to be one heck of a good liar, isn't he? You did a really good job with this part. His phone conversation with Sarah seemed quite ...

Ooh, excellent chapter. Very nice job. I still love your characterization, you're really good at helping the reader get to know your characters. *repeats self ad naseum* Let's see.... in ...

Oooh, great chapter. I like the continuation of the brick metaphor, and the contrast between Eric's thoughts and what he actually says. I also love the bit about the birthday ...

Thanks! Wow, that was really good. I like how we're kind of thrust into Kate's world with little or no explanation, making the reader want to hear more of the ...

Loved this third chunk, as well. lol cake. XD I love the descriptions of all the family member's weird quirks, like Penny's habit of listing people off in age order. ...

thanks very much!

Wow! Very well written. I especially like Naia's characterization. You really know what you're doing! I really have no critique. Keep going, can't wait for chapter 3!