yellowsun

Hey there. I can't exactly give a full review because your story is too short. Try making it a little longer. Although this one was good. You decribed the mother ...

Hey there, Great story, sorry but i didn't get to read the first chap. Maybe i'll do it later. But anyway, this was nice. You didn't have so much mistakes ...

Hey there! nice story. I could definitely feel it's like a fairytale of some sort. I didn't get the italized paragraphs at first but now i do. Anyway, there's not ...

hey there writewatiwant :) Good story. I was a bit bothered by your writing but i was caught up in it that it didn't matter. Anyway, i didn't see many ...

Looks like all your typos and mistakes have been pointed out. Anyway, your story was short but you did a good job in describing. I hope you write more. i's ...