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thanks! =] when i look at it that way, i see what you mean.

thanks kris! =] i'll def. fix that up!

So amazing! I love the honesty and how romantic it is! The discriptions are awesome and so is the imagery you create! I love the unexpected ending, like the person ...

Actually I posted a new version in Other Poetry, if you wanna see it.

Aahah yes i know =] But thanks again for your criticism. I've already started the second draft, as I guess you'd call it, and I'm almost done. =] I'll post ...

Amazing! It's so heartfelt and real, and what I love is that each reader can take it and interpret it in their own way, sculpting individual feelings =] As far ...

Amazing! I definitley felt what you meant and the description was fantastic! =]

Thanks for the critiques =] Alright Snoink will do. The reason it's like this is because I originally wrote it for a poetry slam in my school and since I'm ...