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Thank you Sasha! I'll be continuing it soon.

Hey Logan! June here! My apologies for not getting to this sooner. I was a little worried that Marge would kill Emily, haha. Marge seems a bit bipolar, too-- it's ...

She killed him. Whenever I update it again I'll make sure it's a bit obvious. I think I'm going to make her some type of mass murderer or serial killer... ...

Right.. the semi-colon thing! I'll try to replace those with commas and such. I like your idea on taking a different approach to it, I'll definitely do that. Thanks for ...

No problema. Just for an English narrative it's pretty good. :)

Thank you all for reviewing. I updated it for a second time; Kat it isn't necessary for you to re-review, as I only changed minor things. But the first to ...

Nice, but I don't think it has much of a rhythm and is a bit boring.. Spice it up a bit!

Oh, and this is the rough draft; still needs some tweaking and stuff. So, suggestions would be nice.