writingangel24xx

Thanks so much for the amazing review shady. I will definitely be using your advice. Also, I felt bad for taking away the focus on Lana's two friends, Al and ...

After re-reading the poem (I went too fast the first time) I actually read the bottom part more clearly. I liked it a lot better but if I were the ...

This was good and believable. Keep up the good work!

I think it could use more descriptive language. The story line is nice but its seems very plain to me.

I can't wait to post the second chapter once I get more reviews! Hopefully that one is better than the first :)

This was interesting. I thought it was very original but when you introduced the characters appearances I thought you should be more subtle and not just state them. But it ...

This is really good and it actually rhymed which was nice. It was pretty obvious but I think it is reasonable that a king should long for freedom. All kings ...

I really enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more.