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Hey! I think you did an awesome job portraying the way the character thinks and feels. I didn't really see any grammar mistakes, but I think yiou could have put ...

Hello again! I like this piece a lot. It captures my imagination, and is very believable. It gets you excited, and makes you want to read more. There were just ...

Hey!!! This kept me hooked from the time I started to the time I ended. It was very descriptive, and the characters were well constructed. They had personality, and you ...

Hey, I haven't read your story yet, but I read the bottom of the title where you said you didn't know where you were going. Here's a tip. Before you ...

Dude, this is sweet! The line with the four leaf clover gave me chills. It was pretty sweet. Let me edit just a few things. This is the child that ...

Hi! I see the star! You did a great job here. Don't ignore that urge, but listen to it, and when you've written the poem edit it until it feels ...

Like the others said, this is like the framework for a great poem. You should add a little depth to this, and really mix your feelings in there. Tell how ...

I like this one! It was light and funny, and it made me giggle. Reminds me of my heart’s silent choke After I have taken a sip of a bitter ...

Hey! this is very natural and flowing. I really liked it! I think you could work on the punctuation and capitilazation Here's how I would put it. He was young ...

Tis was super good! Your grammer and spelling are very good, and your story plot is wonderful. I absolutely cannot wait to read the next chapter. I agree with Azila ...

Hey! This is a really interesting poem. I think you should put some paragraphs, though. Let me show you a few things I've noticed. Her Mast moaning and billowing, expressing ...

Awesome Awesome Awesome! This one almost made me cry. It's so sad how quickly children lose their innocence. They should be able to keep it forever. I like how you ...

This is a really awesome piece. I was so curious to know what was in the box! You did an awesome job reeling and hooking your audience. You've got a ...

Hey! Great story you've got going on here! OK, let's start at the beginning. There are many things in this world that go unnoticed. There are many people who seem ...

Wow, this is really cool. I am a Christian, so I appreciate this poem. Angels have always fascinated me, and I thought it was cool how you had an angel ...