ultraviolet

Hey there! So, like GryphonFledgling said, the pacing here is a lot better - a lot . You have a nice mix of current happenings, exposition, and thoughts. However, there ...

Hey there! (I like to think that by now you'll realize that I'm not going to read twenty reviews... so if I repeat anything, sorry.) It was nagging me in ...

Hey there, Skinsles! Again, I only read a few of the reviews, so sorry if I repeat anything. Also again, you're really making this hard on me, you know that? ...

Hey Skinsles! So, I'm not going to read your past reviews since there are so many and I'm assuming you've edited since then. So sorry if I repeat anything. Austin ...

Hey there! First of all, at the beginning of this, I thought the MC was a man. I realized later that it wasn't, but I still couldn't help imagining her ...

Hey there! So, I'm not going to take a ton of time here, just focus on a couple little things that popped out to me. First off, the hole Brown ...

Hey there! Well, first off, since this is a fan faction, technically you have to put it under Fan Fiction, otherwise it's considered plagiarism, I think. Also, it's not a ...

Hey there! First off, I have to say, I really like this. Good premise, good voice. The first paragraph really hooked me. Probably the biggest problem here is that you ...

What can I say? I love this. I'd read it. In fact, there have been times lately when I've thought while reading other books that I'd rather read this. The ...

Hey there! Okay, so as always, this is for the most part really good. I'm not going to go line-by-line, because those get tedious and you don't really need it ...

Hey, so, like they said, this is really short. Because of this, it's really hard to get a feel for the writing. I'd tell you ways to fill this out, ...

Hey there. So, going out on a limb, I'm gonna hafta disagree with borntobe. Sure, not a lot happens, but that doesn't mean that it's entirely bad. You've got a ...

Hey there! Okay, so first of all, I'm a little confused about all of the political stuff. The Duritian army is invading, taking over... yet the Maliean queen is still ...

Hey there! *isn't even going to mention how much Reviewer's Block she's had to put this off so long... >.>* *cough* Anywho! On to the review. The room was dark ...

Hey there! (I haven't really read the other reviews, so sorry if I repeat anyone.) First off, short chapters. I know the other's have mentioned this. At least seemingly suggested ...