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This is a wonderfully dark poem that highlights not only on human strength, but on the strength of free will and the quest for freedom. I really like that this ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to review your piece! Everyone has a label. Mine says dork, nerd, and geek. I would change the period into a colon. "Definitely", not "defiantly". My mom ...

Greetings once more~ I'm going to skip the niceties and get right to reviewing. The opening paragraph needs some work. We need something unresolved to make us want to read ...

I certainly like this poem a lot more than your last. I feel like this one had stanzas, yes? YWS doesn't work well with those, so put a period or ...

I enjoyed this poem quite a lot. However, I found myself over-analyzing it. Firstly, people don't go to the movie theatre and stay quiet because there is "too much" sound. ...

I'M OVERWHELMED BY WONDERFUL POETRY!! Seriously, I love this. Not as much as Earth Kisses, but I love this nonetheless. I can just see the characters and feel them and ...

I really like this poem! It took a very nice shape! ;) Since I have no nitpicks, I'll jump into the niceties. The thing that I liked most about this ...

This is a very beautiful poem! I loved every moment of it! Some lines were a little awkward, but I'm here to help with that. I truly am never going ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to review this piece! This piece is short, and I can't necessarily say that it's to my liking. I don't prefer stories to be long, but whenever ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to edit and review your piece! A blade of cold air slapped his cheeks. A thick fog covered the area. A silhouette was cutting through the fog. ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting for a review! Once upon a time that never happened This is a little awkward, so I would suggest to change this. Remember not to begin sentences ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to edit and review your piece! The first thing that I see is that your paragraphs are quite long. I wont pick out where they should be ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to edit and review your piece! and pointed it to his stomach This is very flat description. I would try "jabbed" instead. While the MC is trying ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to edit your piece! Ashley stared, her face soaked with tears. The Shifties had found them. And it was her fault. She watched her parents dance with ...

Sergeant Ulala reporting to edit your piece! Ashley stared, her face soaked with tears. The Shifties had found them. And it was her fault. She watched her parents dance with ...