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Un-bloody-believable. That's the first thing that popped to mind. This is SO good. There's obviously no plot or anything, but for a quick scene, this is great. You have all ...

Griffinkeeper: I believe the character is seventeen, not three. At the bottom of the text, it says that when she was three, her dad said the same thing to her, ...

Like Sarah said, it's pretty unlikely one girl would survive (although you hint at others as well). There is no reason that she survived (perhaps for some reason she was ...

This is really well written, and very interesting. I would worry about the beginning; it's a bit hard to read. It's especially odd that Isabel is worried about shoe marks ...

I am very intrigued. It appears this Kent fellow has some sort of power with words. Very interesting. Some words of advice: be careful how you try to physically describe ...

[pre]This was very good, you used good dramatic timing. For example, the one word paragraph "Poison." That alone actually drew me in to continue reading. Some things were a little ...