tommyknocker

Wow, I wrote this story over year ago. And I thought it was terrible.

Hey everyone thanks for the comments. I understand the characters need more fleshing out, but I didn't want a too big of a story. But maybe that's just laziness on ...

Hey, I agree Sargsauce. I write stories on a whim. I think I should really flesh it out and develop it more. I hating writing cliche stories, and I felt ...

Hi. i don't usually read poems. But i clicked on one, you know just for the casual glance. I'm no expert, but i really enjoyed reading this. I like how ...

Hi i really like this piece. You kept it simple and fresh. I think the oppression of fat girls in everything is oversued. Especially in school environments. But you have ...

Well with the amount of reviews there's no point in me saying much. It's basically all being covered. Great Job. ~ T.K

Hi. I liked this piece. But, i come away feeling muddled. Perhaps that's just me. Probably is me. So don't worry. Anyhow, i really liked your use of descriptions throughout ...

Wow I'm really confused by this. I think you repeat Rainbow Supreme too much. It makes me think his some exotic pizza.

Hi all thanks for posting your comments. Immediately after i woke up i wrote this story (?) don't know why. It just came to me. Anyhow, i should make things ...

When i was in year 3, i got bored with reading the "Laser Beam Series." So i read Bram Stokers, "Dracula." Nice read, and it's not that scary.

Hi all thanks for posting. where is all that fear and terror? Was there not another door to run out from? I did have some better ideas for this. One ...

This is very well narrated. It reminds me of a loving grandmother, so delicately written. Terrific stuff. I have nothing else to say.

Just keep going. Don't get bogged down. Just keep the words flowing, even if you don't think the story is gelling together. Don't lose hope!

Hi, thanks to all who commented thus far. Yes, it may feel cluttered and a bit under done. I just wrote it on impulse, for i had this dream involving ...

Hey, it wasn't harsh. Thanks! I wrote this for a competition a while back and it had to be under 500 words so that's why the ending may feel compact,abrupt ...