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Hmm... 8) Very nice, sis. Quite an improvement. I don't have time for a full-blown critique at the moment. (Although, when do I ever? :wink: ) However, I will offer ...

Right then, where was I? Oh yes! The critique. :twisted: (Here we go...) Émon rolled his shoulders, and felt the scabs that striped his back wrinkle. They’ve just begun to ...

All right, Shafter, you asked for it... :D I'm just going to go through this the way I reviewed/edited it. Top to bottom and then some overall stuff at the ...

Very nice. That's my first impression. I kinda checked this out on a whim. (He's a bit of a sucker for sappy love stories.) [I believe the term you are ...