time_fox

It would seem you put a lot of information into a couple of chapters or how ever you split it up. In 2 the sentences aren't making any sense for ...

This is really great. ^_^ Emotions are portrayed, and you get what the song is trying to say without music. ^_^ But it's short :( I agree if you can ...

I'm not really sure on what emotion you are trying to portray here. Normally a song will make you feel something, but I'm just confused with this. Well, also this ...

I love vampire stories and it seems you came up with something different. Which is a good thing. Since everyone else tipped on the grammar, I'm not very good in ...

Over all it is good. Now, it really didn't get my attention so in the end I just shimmed over it. If this is more focused on teens you should ...

This is really good. You portray a good emotion in this song. What would I do? I would break down and cry. I would like to hear some music to ...

Hahahaha, this is awesome. It doesn't rhyme but oh well. This is really funny and good. "The weather is a-cooling, Halloween is round the bend, Zombies hang from ev’ry house ...

This is really cool. It sort of reminds me of some of my friends. What made you want to come up with song? Once I'd be lost without you To ...

Well, I don't want to ramble about spelling mistakes. Everyone else got to do that. It's a nice and simple poem. Simple but yet has a very good meaning behind ...

Not a bad idea at all. It's very confusing thought. You are rushing everything and it is hard to keep up with it. Go back and explain things a little ...

Well, the story line sounds interesting. First of all this "Besides the fact that I was about to get ran over and that the driver would get hurt more than ...

Well, so far this is just ordinary life of any teenage. Try a paragraph form. Just for me it's easier to fallow. The beginning is really weird and I didn't ...

I really like this. Coming from a big back round with the military, I know they really like a small thank you. I'm kind of surprised I didn't see more ...

This is really good. The person above caught the mistakes I found so I wont repeat them. The emotion in this story is good, but there is something in this ...

For the most part I liked. Like everyone else has said it's rushed, and also werewolves and vampires are used way too often. So try to use something that no ...