tigeraye

Thanks, I changed a couple things that you mentioned. Tell me what you think

hm, you made some good points. I changed a few things about the mother's reactions and Toby's dialogue, please do tell me if its better.

lol that was quick. Thanks

well, my advice is not to worry about how a story will be improved over another draft. Just write the story over again and it's impossible to not be better ...

I'm taking your advice and doing a research paper on hypertrophic cardiomyopathy before my next story hahaha

i hope thats not too tough to read w/ the apostrophes glitching out.

Hi, thanks for the review. I really like your opening line. It%u2019s quick, precise and develops intrigue right away. I would maybe swap the word %u2018she%u2019 for the girls actual ...

uh I hope you can read my comments below and understand it better, if not its cool. I always appreciate someone else reading anything I write, thanks a bunch.

nah, it's cool, I didn't think you were being rude or harsh. The message is to treat people kindly, as you never know when the last time you'll see them ...

yeah, the ambiguity is intentional, although i have it in my head the reason the two never saw eye to eye. The reason is its not the point of the ...

Hey, thanks. Cassius Clay is the birth name of Muhammad Ali, he changed his name in 1964, about 20 fights into his boxing career. The narrator here would be a ...

Thanks, the lack of reviews and likes on this was really demotivating. The clarification of whether it was past or present or not was something i worried about, but ended ...

hm, I see where you're coming from, yeah, although I wouldn't call this a medical fiction. The focus isn't on the astheniology of cancer itself, but rather the aspect of ...

hm yeah that sounds better, thanks

To elaborate - Wally is face to face with his wife. He had been diagnosed with terminal cancer less than an hour ago, and then just learned that his wife ...