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First off, you make refrence to knives a BITTT much here. I'm not saying it makes the piece horrible because actually I quite liked it, just lay off of repeating ...

I understand your point of view. Hey, youre a young writer? I was one once too. WHat you need to understand is tht this is very short and undetailed, I ...

Muted glints, a sharp flash, (juvenile line... I feel no description or passion in it, not a good begginning.) You’ve sold your life. (this is on okay line but again, ...

Hmmm... What can I comment except that I am really taking a liking to your work. I find it attracting and emotional and truly from the heart.. I just love ...

Personally, I thought it was in fact NOT cliche. It stayed away from cliche... to me.. The lines I feel a bit uncomfortable with are the part of the sea ...

Her eyes Piercing through mine (tacky was my first thought on lines 1 and 2) Glowing garnet with rage Menacing and condemning me Pitiless (AHA, however I was wrong. The ...

The red wine is gone. Drunk. To the very last drop. The wine is gone. So are the cocktail napkins that I used to blot the wine spilled on your ...

Not just a secret, this was bigger (nice beginning) Blocked out for so long Denying its existence (first 2 lines: I felt the emotion) I lied for months To everyone, ...

If she ran. she ran from you. (horrible) If she was broken apart; she wasn't broken from the start. (okay...........) You took a knife and shoved it into her heart. ...

I thought thiss poem was good. Not excellent and not bad but good. It seemed less like a poem to me and more like... I don't know how to describe ...

This piece is uhm,, interesting? Hello! I'm Tamara. Anyways, this seemed to be half poem/song kind of a thing and it wasn't bad. You could say I didn't really HATE ...

A Boy sees a girl. The Boy likes the girl. the Girl likes the boy. They kiss. They walk together. They talk to each other. They hold each other. They ...

Another poem by you! I didn't even realize until I saw your avatar. Ahahha. Anyways you're very talented. I also enjoyed this poem very much. Who cares about puncuation? We ...

I am not going to post anything. What a weird thing though. I dislike this kind of poetry because I feel it doesn't come from the heart enough. I mean ...

Not bad. I don't see how it's a poem. Maybe it belongs in other poetry? But it's fairly good. I disliked the topic but the writing was fine. It needs ...