theotherone

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of the story. I smiled back, removing my fingers from the black and white ...

Hello there. :) I sat in English class while chewing on my pen cap and listening to Ms. Cassidy talk about Edgar Allen Poe and the symbolism in The Fall ...

Hello there. :) “I called you, because I needed you to know something.” She said, looking down at her hands. “Tell me, please.” He whispered. “I never stopped loving you,” ...

Hello there. :) His heart was beating faster, and faster, and he wanted to pick her up, kiss her, and take her right upstairs . Upstairs should be one word. ...

Aw... I love this poem! Twins will take over the world. ;) I don't think I've got anything bad to say. I really liked this, and like Truth said, it ...

Hello there. :) This was a powerful piece. I love the emotions in it, and the way you've portrayed your characters. Like Dudette, I didn't find any mistakes, so there's ...

Hello there. :) I'll have to agree with the others too... It definitely needs more substance. Details about their life together, their friends, the school, their problems... Why did he/she ...

Hello there. :) "Je suis une femme rafinée. Femme is a feminine word, therefore une would be right. At least you've got your é at the right places. :) Her ...

Hello there. :) As I think back on what’s happened two months earlier I realize Marcus is a liar, So the story was okay. I like the little twist, because ...

I'm here again for another review. :) I loved my bean bag. True, it was a little bit worn and it was going saggy in some places. And it still ...

Hello there, I'm here as requested! I really liked this poem. The imagery was awesome, and the way you wrote it... Well, it's pretty good. ;) I don't have any ...

Hello Dudette, I'm here for another review. :) I didn't think I found any nitpicks in this chapter. There's the transitions again, they could be a little more slick, but ...

Hello Smiley, I'm here as requested! First off, I want to point out the weird way you've separated this poem... Or maybe not separated but spaced? I'm not sure how ...

Hello Dudette, I'm here as requested! :) I still blamed the way my heart was hammering through my chest like it was going to explode, though. “He is so fit!” ...

Hello there, I'm here as requested! So I'll begin with corrections and then go on with my overall impression. He stayed in Uterus for a whole nine months, but when ...