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Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with characters and plot. Running along it comma, I heard him calling after me, asking me to stop ...

Hello there, I'm here as requested! It made me feel so boring in my pantsuit and plain pointed-toe high heels. I wanted to ask her how she got her scar, ...

Hello there, it's me again! :) And I'm back with nitpicks. ;) She was annoyed that I was missing the chance to hang out with Brandon but I texted her ...

Hello there, I'm here as requested! I'm a little late, but at least I'm here. ;) “Have a late night last night?” Shouldn't it be had ? I'm sorry for ...

Hello, it's me again. ;) So I didn't find any nitpicks, I think IcyFlame picked them all out. The story is good. Is this the final chapter? I feel like ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. At first I'm confused and then I realise she's making a ...

Hello Dudette! You know how I work by now... So I'll begin. :) So far this lesson comma, I’d barely managed to answer any of the questions that had been ...

Hello there. :) I didn't find any nitpicks for you, which is good. ;) The plot was good, but the way you introduced it could be worked on. You seem ...

Hello there. :) This is a great beginning, but it was confusing. The use of he and she isn't helping much. I think you should actually put names so we ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. I go to sleep every night in my single bed and ...

Hello there. :) I don't know if you've got a lot of nitpicks to do, but I'm still going to quote it all so it's easier for you to correct. ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then proceed to say my overall impression on your story. He had a way about him that I showed he had ...

Hello there. :) I'm not one to get jealous of those girls that wear a ton of makeup and have every boy in the school after her , but when ...

Hello there. :) Chapter 1: It`s Time `` Come on Kesha!``, Tristian said , as , he was trying to kiss his girlfriend , that he has been with for ...

Hello there. :) First, SmylinG already pointed out pretty much every grammar related mistake I found, so I won't point them out a second time. Just make sure you do ...