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That's great! I will definitely go and review those chapters during Review Day!

I was referring to the line "Because...." at the beginning of the last stanza. I don't know why, but I've always felt ...s at the end of a line or ...

Glad to help! The YWS program is weird; a tip for future poems: if you hit shift while hitting enter, it will only single space the enter, then when you ...

Thank you so much for this review and bringing my attention back to this piece! It has been half-forgotten for far too long.

That's interesting, and sad.

It's not that you're not good at writing poems; it's just the lines are a bit bulky, you just have to break them a bit differently. Are you sure those ...

That makes sense. Thank you for explaining. :)

Sorry; I forgot to mark it as a review.

That makes sense; it's good to try different things. I'm not sure what my opinion of it is; I think either version would probably work fine. It's a very subtle ...

Thank you so much for the review! It was really nice hearing the opinion from your perspective. :)

Thanks for the review; I'm glad you liked it! The indent thing is because I feel the first line could be interpreted as what he's saying and the second line ...

Okay, that makes sense.

Okay; that makes sense then. I keep on forgetting to say I like your names. Also, knowing the ages, I like the dynamic that Miles is the younger one, but ...

Oh, I get it now. Ha, that's punny. Nice.

Have you tried abecedarians? They're like acrostics, except instead of a word on the side, it's the alphabet. They're longer, but just as fun.