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There are some grammar and spelling mistakes that were kinda distracting to the poem. I don't think glisted is a word. It's a pretty good poem, though. I like poems ...

I didn't completely understand it either, but it was definitely deep and had a strong feel to it. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors! I agree with Zone ...

I like the piece a lot, it has an eery, whimsical yet melancholy kind of feel to it, it kinda reminds me of Stargirl. I didn't notice any grammatical or ...

"Your self" should be yourself. It could have a little more flow. Those are the only things I see wrong with it though. I like the imagery and the meaning. ...

I like this a lot, it's mysterious and leaves you with questions and wondering. I love that. It leaves a lot to the imagination and lets the reader's imagination have ...

Welcome to YWS!! Wow. The main thing you want a poem, or any story really, to do, is to move you and make you feel something. This piece definitely moved ...

I liked this a lot. It made me laugh. It seems like something my friend Savannah would say, but then it also kinda reminds me of The Hitchhiker's Guide to ...

I like it. It definitely has intrigue. Maybe it's from reading chapter 2 and chapter 3, and then chapter 1, but I'm not sure if this chapter fits with the ...

Towards is one word, you have it as to wards. There were a few other grammar/spelling errors, but they all could be easily fixed by a quick once-over. Oscar kind ...

I don't think anyone would actually ever say to their brother, "You're an adult in you early twenties." Little too telly, not enough show. I wouldn't say that Joseph scampered. ...

I like your theme and the story behind the poem. Fix up your grammar mistakes and it'll be even better. It's an awesome poem, but could use a little less ...

It started a little slow and ended a little weird (see above comment from remember) but there was a little gold nugget in the middle, amidst all the grammar mistakes ...

Nice poem. I don't actually remember 911, 'cause I was three at the time, but I really like your poem, it changed the country forever. I think the structures of ...

Nice, I like it. We need more Christian fiction out there. Just two nitpicks: In you last sentence, there should be a comma before and after dear reader. I think ...

I like it. I don't feel that the last line of the first stanza has the same rhythm as the rest of the poem, it didn't feel tight. I like ...