tgirly

Hello! Let's get reviewing! As far as your comment, I am not a stranger to formatting problems on YWS. Someone taught me this helpful trick though: if you hit shift ...

Hello! This is a chilling poem and you've got some wonderful, chilling imagery here. A line I'm not entirely sure I like is "Your body walked with such precision that ...

This poem has a very direct message. I like how you don't dance around any of the issues but just get right to the point. However, especially in the first ...

Hello, fellow After Watch member! Review time! When I first see this poem, I'm almost unsure how to read it. Reading it from top to bottom makes more sense, but ...

Hello and happy Anniversary of Joining YWS (I'm about 11 days off, but it's close enough.) In the second sentence, there should be a semicolon after intentional since what follows ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! I will be reviewing your piece today. The feel of this piece reminds me a lot of prose-poetry. Is that what it is? Why ...

I like the moral of the poem; it's not whether or not you take life at a fast pace or a slow pace, you can still experience something amazing and ...

"Soles saturated" Soles should be soul. Sole is like the bottom of a shoe. "Night strikes morning, out like a candle" I feel the comma is unnecessary. My favorite lines ...

This poem takes on a very sensitive subject in a risky way. It's short but impactful and incredibly dark. I might suggest, if you wanted to lengthen the poem, try ...

Hi; tgirly here to review your poem. I'll try to make this good for a fellow After Watcher :) This piece is beautiful. I love how the poem is aligned ...

Me again! Let's get right into the review. "She whirls around as I open the door and gasps." This seems like a bit of an overreaction; if the room was ...

"Soles saturated" Soles should be soul. Sole is like the bottom of a shoe. "Night strikes morning, out like a candle" I feel the comma is unnecessary. As far as ...

Hello! Tgirly here to review your work. "almost gothic looking windows appeared" Commit to it! Are they gothic looking or aren't they? Or maybe even just say they're gothic windows. ...

Hello! I'll be reviewing this piece today. I haven't read any of the other chapters, but from what I gather, you have a really interesting story premise here; really creative ...

Hi! A brief disclaimer: I don't know much about sonnets, so I'm sorry if any of this contradicts with the sonnet format, I'll try to avoid critiquing structure. 'until it's ...