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I appreciate the comments, but I must defend that this is a poem and should not be moved to other fiction. To say that this looks unprofessional is a bit ...

This was really original. I didn't understand it all but i guess that's what makes poetry so great. Keep writing Exactly. That is why poetry is so hard to critique. ...

Hi, my name is Tanith and I approve this poem. :ftw:

Ironically, I was not the only one that had ghosts plaguing my past. Cathy, unfortunately, had just as many if not more tribulations in her life than I had endured. ...

I don’t know about you, but there is no way I think like that. Who’s writing? Do they really think like that? post dramatic stress syndrome I believe you mean ...

Hmm, I actually really like this. I haven't personally read many stories from a male POV, much less romances, and I think you have a good thing going here. One ...

Thank you for your help! I appreciate it! I have gone back and made the corrections you have requested. Very insightful and helpful. Here is part three. I changed bacon. ...

Thank you for the pointers. I will say that it is important to remember that the narrator is at least 24 (if not older). He mentions that he was 15 ...

Hey guys many thanks. I have 20 something pages done so I will be posting the next part shortly. Right after I go get some breakfast *stomach rumbles* I'll PM ...

Here is an edited version of what I first wrote. Elesther felt his hands before she saw them. "You look beautiful tonight," Khelar said as he gently brushed Elesther's brunette ...

Thanks for the reply. Would anyone else like to add anything?

Thank you very much, I added a little but I feel asleep near the end do to lack of sleep. I also made the changes you suggested. Cheers.

Chapter Eight “Order, I said, order,” the loud gruff voice I had heard from the battlefield yelled across the room. (I do not like this sentence at all. Give a ...

Chapter Seven Eryk led the way through the underground tunnel. I could almost taste his fear, of what, I had no idea. Specters weren’t as scary as we made them ...

Thanks! Here's Chapter Six! I hope you like it! Eryk pushed himself up, his eyes widening in surprise. I tried to run as many possible escape plans through my head ...