sweetjane

Thanks. I think I am going to make this idea into some sort of series and expand on all of my points while adding the points you said

Yea, that point about the verb repulsed is really obvious now that someone pointed it out. I now read it like that. This was an essay for a contest which ...

Would you rather have me review it as a meaningless essay and highlight all of your grammar mistakes or something of the sort? I know I am new here and ...

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This is really fascinating. Im also glad that you included credible sources in your bibliography as the whole thing sounds conspiracy theory like.

This is really fascinating. Im also glad that you included credible sources in your bibliography as the whole thing sounds conspiracy theory like.

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I love your second paragraph- don't cut it. Just insert between the first and second paragraphs one expanding the player. I feel like this poem could be two as you ...