sunwater

. good job

i love it its better then the twilight book. this is so more intesting then watching a girl with depresion problems lol

I like this I did'nt find anything wrong but thats me im more on a spelling person not a looking at things like " ;< ,, thats is not my ...

Ok i will do that next time but that was a test run. I was thinking that in the first chapter I wanted to leave readers wanting to want to ...

this is very good I like your main person in the story and how bad she is at flirting. But I was wanting the last sentence at least plz.

this is a interesting thing you are doing but im thinking there in a park

is there going to be a flash back on some battles and when she said magic she is saying she can use it right.

i love this but is this the start because if it is i would just like to see more of what the character looks like. but i like how theres ...

well i just looved this story you did i really got into what you where talking about and what was happening. but i would like to know more about what ...