sugarbear

Wow, this was incredibly encouraging! Thank you so much for your thoughts and comments! I will definitely take all of those things into consideration as I am editing. It is ...

Thanks for your comments! Very helpful. :) About her response to being told she will be married... The reason she doesn't ask who is because there is no one that ...

Excellent point! When I was reading over this before posting I thought I had changed that, but I guess not. Thank you! I appreciate your comments! I know the chapters ...

Thanks for your input! I am am trying to raise questions with the reader in this first chapter, and more answers will come later. Do you think this leaves you ...

Thanks for catching the mistake! Keeping everything in the right tense is important! Also, thank you for your other suggestions! I am so glad you took the time to read ...

Thank you so much. I really appreciate your input. Those are some very good things to think about. For me, beginning a story is the hardest part and I am ...

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Wow, the suspense is so intense! You writing draws me in quickly and I have so many questions about what is going on in the story. I don't completely understand ...

I greatly enjoyed your writing. The beginning is full of suspense and it grips you and draws you in! Yet, the chapter answers some of your questions without giving you ...