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Re: A Brief Confession
Grammar first :) It should be "Or the heavens ever deny the soul THEY save?" or you could do "Or heaven ever deny the soul it saves?" "Saphire" and "whishing" ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Missing Italian Sands
We’d gone swimming in the waters until our skin mimicked raisins This was my absolute favorite :D I could be reading it wrong in my head, but something seems a ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Mirror Girl
"My dear," Hell said, "come closer now," the virgin girl complied. He stained her skin like bloody rags in his lustful devil-eyes. First of all, that's just plain genius. AMAZING ...
Oct 3, 2010 -
Re: Beautiful Human
There are a few things I want to nitpick at... First of all, the third stanza is the only one that doesn't rhyme. You could have it rhyme or avoid ...
Oct 3, 2010
