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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Clover's Curse - Chapter 12

    God I can't believe it took me seventeen days, eight months, and thirty-two hours to review this. Sorry. Anyway, this was better. I liked some of the wicked exciting descriptions, ...

    Mar 21, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Clover's Curse - Chapter 11

    Huh. Well, I'll start by saying your writing is surprisingly good. Punctuation and grammar were both almost spotless, and the only thing that annoyed me technicality-wise would be vocab. There ...

    Feb 9, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Naked Eye:A Story of A Ghost Chapter 1

    For all I know, this is a good story. But the punctuation is so atrocious I can't read it. EX. OF HOW TO USE COMMAS: "Hey, Jack," said Sarah, her ...

    Feb 6, 2009
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Disneyland Romance

    I can't say that I like your name. But let's focus on the story. I was bored. I was so bored I threw up all over the world. But you ...

    Feb 4, 2009
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Dance moves

    Um...this is fictional, right? That last review was pretty worthless. But a thirteen year old girl shouldn't be reading this stuff anyway. Rate it R. I don't like nit-picking, but ...

    Dec 24, 2008
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Diary of a Seventh grade Girl

    What you just posted here = blog material. Especially with the lack of punctuation and grammar. It's sad that you like Abercrombie. But, besides that, don't be a punk or ...

    Dec 18, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Train Wreck Chapter one

    Woah. You need to take this off right now before you get banned. It's practically chatspeak. Learn how to capitalize and punctuate before posting on a writers website. Please. Once ...

    Dec 4, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Welcome to the Jungle

    Huh. This was a little strange. Probably the main thing I would suggest would be character stuff. If the characters aren't odd or interesting, the plot isn't going to matter. ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: untitled ( the raid maybe) -part one

    I'm annoyed at the title. I refuse to read stories that don't have titles. If you don't have a good enough imagination to grab something arbitrary out of the sky, ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Derivatives 1.1

    Damn, this was pretty weird but I liked it. There were a few grammar sort of errors but I hate nit-picking so I won't bother. I liked how stupid Frankie ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: "Voice" Chapter 1. here it is, what do you think o

    Wow. It sure took me a long time to get on here to review. But I understand why, so it's okay. I'm not much of a nit-picking kind of guy. ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Flame Assassin~Chapter I:Encounters

    I know you said you don't expect a long review with how long this is, but this is too long to even read in one sitting. You're going to have ...

    Nov 14, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Swamp Creature (Chapter 1)

    I had felt a storm coming. I could smell the rain. The air was warm and thick with moisture. Earlier that morning, my bones ached and I had a little ...

    Nov 14, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Worry, Fear and Pain.

    I liked it. Here are a few grammar punctuation problems before I say more. The light from the surrounding city gave the park trees phantom like shadows that changed with ...

    Nov 14, 2008


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