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Thanks for that :)

You're welcome

Sphealwithit here, Happy review day Hope the following helps. The use of the & symbol makes it seemed rushed and it reads too fast. You said 'for you have betrayed' ...

Sphealwithit here...Happy reviewing day I do like this poem, however I was expecting it to be longer. I like how its posed like a question and I love the art ...

Thank you XD It took me forever to write this chapter :)

The hug was strange when I was writing it, however she only hugs Hayley because she is scared and she is the closest thing to safety she has.

Thank you :)

Thanks i shall try and fix the mistakes. The feeling of a romance is there early because its not heading that way :)

Thanks for that :) i'll fix them

Hello, Sphealwithit here, A happy reviewing day to you :) I like the idea behind the story, i'm currently studying psychology so this kinda thing interests me. You have forgotten ...

I love this poem The first stanza starts really well, its strong. I like the: Dancing on crystal-blue waves part. The conclusion is as strong as your opening and the ...

The descriptions are so vivid, it actually sounds real. I like how you described the ocean as being innocent. The theme is so dark yet you make it seem peaceful ...

I love the language it's different. The plot line is awesome how'd you come up with the idea? You could add more of how gwen feels like how does she ...

I like the plot line, it's a good idea. It goes too qucikly though if you know what i mean, a little more detail would make it even better.