spencbailey

The liberal use of spacing in this story kills my will to read it. I disagree with the comments above saying that the cop scene was unrealistic. I like the ...

Strike the "there once was..." and study up on using semicolons. (I'm not saying I know perfectly how to use them, but I noticed many times you used a semicolon ...

Personally, I agree with you. Critically, I think it's too much opinion without enough support. Opinion is meaningless unless you can support it with relative issues or concerns that people ...

Intriguing and provocative theme. It appears to me that you had a good idea what the story was about and how it'd start, climax, and end but you failed to ...