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Thank you! I tried to find a middle ground with the detail because as I told BlackNether12 i want her to be focused on her friend.

Ok, I went back through and put in a little more detail. I didnt want to put a lot of it because i want her to focus and be scared ...

Thank you !

Thanks.I know my spell, punctuation and grammar checks jacked up. And yeah don't really know where to put different paragraphs.

Thanks!

Its knd of hard to understand. I couldnt really follow what was going on in the story. I like your writing style, if you tweaked it a little i think ...

That was really good it may be a little cliche but its not completely over used.

that was awesome! it was a little jumpy but it was exactly where it needed to be.