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Wow. I must say, because of certain...er...people in my life, I haven't been encouraged to read much fantasy - particularly in the form of werewolves and vampires. But YOU, my ...

Hmmm...I'm not sure this was exactly the place to post this - but I'm no mod, so it's not my place. However, about the post itself - it definitely sounds ...

Hi, there! First of all I just want to say that this is a very good idea for a story - it has a lot of potential for excellence and ...

"Hell no!" Brad yelled, "No offense." He said to Aaron. Arron shrugged, "Non taken." Arron = Aaron Non = None Comma after "Hell" --- A pretty good chapter, in all! ...

Lol, "hate mail!" You are a coward and you stinketh like a pig. lol! Hilarious. I do agree that you could have split it up into longer bits, but I'm ...

Mmm, I'll come back with a more detailed critique later, but a couple of quick things before I retire. The plot is a little too Matrix-ish for my taste. An ...

NITPICKS "If anything goes wrong make sure that sword of yours is ready." He said, indicating to his own dagger. You don't indicate 'to' something! You just indicate it. "indicating ...

I'm used to such senses mother" Rebecca said flatly. senses = scenes? :) I love this...not a lot to say that I already told you in the pm. :P If ...

This is really, really awesome, as always. As the previous critter said, there's not a lot to nitpick. You asked me if your charecters were far the MC is very ...

Wow...this is really good! I really enjoyed your imagery, and the way you almost made the joy so JOYFUL that it was almost painful. A lot of your imagery wasn't ...

Just a couple of minor things, then I'll gush, I promise. You had a few typos: starred = stared, etc, but nothing you couldn't pick up on your own if ...

Awwww, MAN!!! What do you mean, will not be continued? *murders over internet* It's a great story. I love Vikki's charecter, and I agree with other critiquers in that you ...

Very nice, extremely well done! Almost as good as Dad. good = well Besides that, just look at other critiques. I'm so sucked into this story! Great work. ~MademoiselleKOol 8)

I just want to say one quick thing: "where's the keys" is wrong. Keys is plural, "where's" is singular. Where's the key or Where are the keys. Otherwise, I loved ...

Hey there! I really liked this piece, overall. I think you have a very engaging writing style that kept me reading. A couple of things: Rubbing his furry covered hands ...