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Re: Holi and her
I love this line: 'The messages you sent burst in me Like small water balloons filled of glee' It is a love that's lacking yet not lost, yet it bursts ...
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Re: NOTE TO SELF.
From Google: There's a lot of sentimentality here, yet the reliability gets lost when you don't mention other outside sources. This is where you run into a rut as an ...
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Re: Chapter Eight: Unexpected Visitor
I am going to guesstimate that this is also a woman that knows when a fight is coming. You're building audio imagery that this is a scrappy fighter that learned ...
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Re: Centaur Stage CHP 3 {Sanders Sides Fanfiction}
Thank you for using ellipses correctly in the first two lines. That was a nice use of imagery with "thrumming the ceiling" for the rain. I can already guesstimate that ...
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Re: Houseflies
This is a perfect poem and so knowledgable. 1. I would describe them as compost fiends. 2. It makes me feel seen that humans are not the only sentient beings ...
Mar 10, 2026
