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silverthorn

  • Short Story » General, General Re: That kid

    sad. But moving. The great (and kind of depressing) thing about this piece is we ALL know that kid. One thing I'd try to develop is the REASON for his ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Lake Girls (Please Review!)

    You've picked a good scene to open up your story. However, there are a few parts that distracted me. First would be your use of parenthesis. You should try to ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Ignorance - Part I

    You've got an intriguing start. One thing I noticed about the first paragraph in particular was the use of passive voice. Of course it's okay to use some of the ...

    Dec 2, 2008


I was flummoxed by fractious Franny's decision to abrogate analgesics for the moribund victims of the recent conflagration. Of course, to display histrionics was discretionary, but I did so anyways, implicating a friend in my drama to make the effect cumulative. I think a misanthrope would have a prosaic appellation, perhaps one related to autonomy and the rejection of anthropocentrism. I think they wouldn't think much of the prominence of watching the coagulation of tea to prognosticate future malevolent events, not even if those events were related to jurisprudence.
— Spearmint