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Re: That kid
sad. But moving. The great (and kind of depressing) thing about this piece is we ALL know that kid. One thing I'd try to develop is the REASON for his ...
Dec 2, 2008 -
Re: Lake Girls (Please Review!)
You've picked a good scene to open up your story. However, there are a few parts that distracted me. First would be your use of parenthesis. You should try to ...
Dec 2, 2008 -
Re: Ignorance - Part I
You've got an intriguing start. One thing I noticed about the first paragraph in particular was the use of passive voice. Of course it's okay to use some of the ...
Dec 2, 2008