silversublime

This is good! It gave me the perfect feeling of calm and relaxation. just a few things: "Through my eyelids closed I can see the sun falling" 'closed eyelids' would ...

This poem isn't very original and there's nothing in it that I've never seen before. It actually would work well as song lyrics, but as poetry it's just mediocre. I ...

This is my first critique on here, so I can't promise that I'll be much help since i don't really know what I'm doing, but I'll try my best. This ...