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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Grey Tidings: Chapter 1 (v4p2)

    Fittingly, the thing I enjoyed most about this was Lorelei herself. She comes across as competent & slightly mischievous, which makes her engaging to follow. The many small details help ...

    Mar 4
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Humor Re: .

    The first thing that caught my eye was the diary-style narration, which works well for the character of Luna. It makes her relatable & establishes her age (12) effectively. It ...

    Mar 3
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: CHAPTER ONE of The Skill Thief of Manila: A LitRPG Apocalypse by Ramon Galvez

    First of all, I enjoyed most the shift from slice-of-life to an apocalypse! I found that the the commute scene was great functionally as both literal movement & thematic setup ...

    Mar 1
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Culture Re: [Deleted]

    This is a beautiful start! Your prose has a real oral-storytelling quality that feels incredibly memorable! I really dig the "geological" personality you give the landscape. The opening image of ...

    Feb 25
  • Short Story » Technology, Science Fiction Re: Theory of The Brain part 1

    This is a fascinating dive into a sci-fi world with a really dark, psychological edge. I love the concept of a child being forced to study "useful" brain science only ...

    Feb 24
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Supernatural Re: Lambent Lavender Lights| schema (pt. 1)

    1. I really dig the vibe of this Null character & the whole contract setup; it’s a total hook. It works well as an introductory scene because it immediately complicates ...

    Feb 24


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— Madeleine L'Engle, A Wrinkle in Time