shylanott

i really like this. and i think it's because you make the story so raw, so blunt, so somehow realistic , even though you're main character is in a rock ...

wait. what? so lauren likes max -- she thinks he's really hot. now all of a sudden kale's gorgeous blue eyes are reeling her in just like that? and now ...

Hey! I really liked reading your written work. There were some typos and grammatical errors, but those, of course, can always be fixed. The dialogue flowed well, but I thought ...

This was unsettling. In a very good way. Firstly, I certainly was not expecting a suicide. Then when it was revealed, it sent chills. I really enjoyed your writing style; ...

umm. I don't know. This was weird. Not bad, not good. Just weird. I had some trouble following the beginning. It seemed very dry and dull. This is just me, ...

Overall, I enjoyed this passage. Though I haven't read your previous chapters, the storyline seems interesting enough. I did find grammatical errors here and there; those, of course, can always ...