shescreamsinsilence

This is a great idea for a figurative writing piece! I do have to agree with spinelli in the fact that you should watch your commas, however. Even though you ...

I find this an amazing prologue! I don't think it matters that it is short. It has the perfect amount of figurative language and is generally beautifully worded. The only ...

This looks like the start of what can potentially be a very interesting story! A few notes, however. Try being a bit more descriptive. It'll add to the fantasy quality ...

I think you're really on to something! I really liked your idea. However, the beginning/middle is a bit vague, and I found myself reaching for possible topics you were talking ...