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Re: Catch Me (prologue)
Hey Caitlin! This is a great start. :) Got a few suggestions for you, and a few notes on grammar and word choice. Here we go: Layla had always been ...
Aug 15, 2010 -
Re: Flawless (Working title)
Hey KitxKat! Nice work. :) Here are my comments for you: ~Overall, I like the story. You pull the reader in right away, and the plot you've set up has ...
Aug 14, 2010 -
Re: Sapphire - elf story (temp. title-still open to suggestions)
Excellent, I really enjoyed it. There were a few things I noticed however... He could ask an eagle for directions, or converse with a dog of cat. did you mean ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Silver Flame
, "is the reason they this place Mourner's Peak. you missed a word there. Otherwise, very nice. I definitely want to read more. :)
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Chapter One - Please Don't Rest Tonight
I didn't realize there was a chapter after the prologue already - so then of course I was very happy to be able to read more right away! :) I ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Prologue - Please Don't Rest Tonight
I like this quite a bit - it draws the reader in right away, and I liked the pacing you used (not too fast, not to slow). I did notice ...
Jul 13, 2008