shadepelt

Okay, this was excellent. I kind of prefer intense poems with big points behind them to ones just about a pretty river (though I do like those) but this was ...

“…sticking to the more open quarters where few houses were above single storey making for easy traveling and lots of open ground to see a threat well before its shadowy ...

Your poem is a work of art. It really portrays emotion, I love it. To me it is bittersweet chocolate, but the ending really sums it all up. I can't ...

I love this story, I've always been a fan of new Cinderella's. Not that the original isn't good, but I like girls with independence! I'm not too picky, but I ...

First of all, fantastic prologue! I started it and wanted to keep reading, it had me thinking. What happened to this person/thing? Why was he/she born to kill? It has ...

Okay, first of all, amazing storyline. I think it needs a bit more development for the setting, and where Vaddy is, but other than that, you're off to a good ...

Incredible! everyone else already pointed out some of my grammar critiques, and now for idea. I thought it was stupendous! it's not like any other vampire story (I'm assuming she ...

this is really good so far. Very interesting and a nice combo of romance/action. I've still only read chap. 1, so bear with me if I ask questions answered in ...

"What?" I asked unconcernedly I would say “indifferently”, unconcernedly sounds a little weird I jumped as I heard my name being shouted.I had been so absorbed in a book that ...

I won't point out a ton of mistakes, because I think the others already did that pretty well, however, I have a few comments: first of all, great story line. ...

I think it is a very great poem, trying to forget the ghosts of the pasts... sort of what I try to do. I also like the mystery... all together ...

“Se turned back to her game of solitaire and moved the eight of spades under the nine of diamonds and flipped the unexposed card.” It should be she. “Looking around, ...

First of all, I love your story. It has a very interesting storyline, and I love your creativity! Some points: “She dropped her bike to the sidewalk as she pulled ...

Yeah, like the person above, I think the imaginary friend/realm thing is super cool. It was sort of depressing how Alex died, but I really liked it. The only things ...