seyonne

Wow, this really makes me want to read the entire story with this character in it! Your writing is nice to read and I can 'hear' the speaker's voice in ...

Not much to add; the above poster handled most of the grammer and technical issues. For me? 'Winged brother'? Whoa, wait a minute, winged? Throws me a little; a guy ...

Wow, this is really good. The only things I can think of to say is, honestly, the sentances seemed a little bit choppy to me. It made it sound a ...