servant4christ

Oooooo very interesting.....But I'm a little confused...what exactly happened on the beach? Very compelling, very much a page turner if I do say so myself :) Keep writing more! ( ...

I completely agree with sodapoplunchbox! I actually came back to see if you had written any more (which I usually don't do) And I was completely thrilled you had! And ...

This was interesting, I think you use the word "out" alot but besides that it was pretty good. There were some spelling mistakes and such, you can use the spell ...

Hey this is a great story!!! I am very much impressed, I enjoy all the descriptions you gave, This story means alot to me to because I know someone who ...

Okay I think this has a very good plot and it has well developed characters. I would however focus very hard on the spelling and the tenses especisally because some ...

Hello my dear friend, I haven't had time to read this whole thing through but yes, I agree it is a tad bit too long...maybe more than a tad...but fear ...

I am interested! I like how you tell the story from different points of view. That is one of my favorite things. I absolutely love all the descriptions of the ...

oohhh bone chilling...I like it :) I really appreciate the detail you put in here! Don't hesitate to add more! Descibe your vampire friend a bit more...and your main character. ...

I have to say I was very impressed with this story. It is was one of the only ones that I've read until the very end. Starting with the protagonist's ...

I believe that your story here is at a little bit of a standstill. I like how you are describing your main character a little bit more and the visions ...