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Hey Wario :) Jai here. Wow, I love the beginning. Nice foreshadowing. “Damn it!” I said, hitting my fist against the cold metal. There was no way I could pay ...

Hey Ben, Jai here :) I have this skill to get ‘em back into the read though; ‘tis a secret that my teacher told me one day: BANG! Apparently it ...

I really enjoyed this poem, the rhyming didn't sound forced until the last stanza. Don’t lose yourself in to the throng, I promise smiling isn’t wrong. Each of us has ...

Howdy, Persephoneia. Jai here :) It had been poorly textured, and, as hungry as I was, it still managed to be somewhat nauseating. What do you mean by poorly textured? ...

This was fantastic :P I loved Bella's speech, but I wish Ebony's had been better. I mean, with fanfiction like that, you could have completely ripped on Tara's writing - ...

Hi Horseradish :) I'm Jai. “John?” he whispered sadly, as if moaning only to the mellowed wind. Hmm. Can a wind be mellow? Can a whisper be like a moan? ...

Hi Fantasy. Welcome to YWS. First, when you look at wall of text like that, what do you feel? I know what I feel - intimidated. To eradicate this feeling ...

Hey :) You've had some awesome reviews on this already, but I couldn't help but drop by and leave my comments. “Where are you, coconut? I know I've found you ...

Hey Georgie :) I have to say, this looks like a very personal piece, and I don't know how well this would be received on YWS. Fiction/prose like this is ...

Hey :) I'm Jai and I hope you find my review helpful. By age seven, I could recite every single detail of it. The starting was absolutely perfect, I could ...

Hey :P I waited a while for someone else to review this and leave a fantastically helpful review, but it didn't happen, so you're stuck with my review which is ...

Hi, Jai here, one of the Four Musketeers, upon your request at our WRFF thread. First, I suggest hiding in a spoiler at the bottom of your post your author's ...

Wow. Just wow. This was fantastic! I was a little daunted by the length, and the strange titles and names that I wasn't accustomed to, but this story, this retelling ...

Hey :) This was a well written story, with a sweet message :) Here are the things that I noticed: “Yes!” they both shouted. While there would be strong emotion ...

Hi :) The small things: What if the prophet was incorrect? Or worse, a sham? What would that mean for his country (but more importantly, for his Presidency)? What could ...