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Re: Secrets of Asyra [Chapter Two]
Really like the story. Interesting, dark and dangerous. Love to see more
May 22, 2014 -
Re: Untitled for now
I liked it. Keeps you interested. Keeps you curious. Definately interested in seeing more.
May 19, 2014 -
Re: The Vampire King - Prologue
I like it. Other then what Midnight and Pencilgirl say, I see nothing else wrong. Mind you, I am not one to take advice from. Love the way you started ...
Dec 17, 2011 -
Re: The Priestess of Fate, Chapter 1 (Part 1)
Interesting. Strange. I love how you entered into the story. I was a little lost as to why they were bidding really. Love the story though.
Dec 16, 2011 -
Re: Dragonmaster Chapter 23: The Pass
Oh cool. I have read this through all the way and love it. At times it seemed a bit rushed and confusing but great. Can't wait to see more. I ...
Dec 12, 2011 -
Re: Elemental Cycle- Fireborn
I really like this. Starts of quick and you don't dawdle on details. Can't wait to see more and hope the publishers like it.
Dec 1, 2011 -
Re: Atlantis Wonders
Interesting and capturing. You don't delve much into the actual plot line but the background of the character. Starting of knowing how Aliza sees things. I like it
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: Ellora/ Chapter 2
creepy. This is really good. It leaves you with an idea of what might be happening but does nothing to clarify.
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: Chapter Eight: Nano
Wow. You are really getting depp and dark. I have to admit I am getting confused with all the names and you seem a bit fast at times.A good storyline ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Chapter Five: Nano
Aw he really cares for her. I have one comment. Sometimes it gets confusing when she has a vision or a memory. Maybe you would be better putting that in ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Chapter Four: NaNo
I love it also. It took me a little bit to realise that the girls were all converging in one place.
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: Chapter One: Rewrite
This is good. Creepy. There is the mystery around the guy, the sorrow around the girl and the hatred for the family. All adds to the build up. I really ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: The Red Cloak
This is good. I agree with the others above and can not find any additional problems. It is an interesting follow up from the actual fairy tale.
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: Fire and Shadow: Chapter 1 part 2
I like the whole way she is short but understanding. What I am confused about, is why she wants to destroy her home and why she married the king when ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: The Immortal Enigma -Chapter 1
That definitely opens with a bang. I keep wanting to know who this guy is that was buried alive. Is he linked with the winged creature? Love the whole setting. ...
Nov 21, 2011