sachipachi1

I like the flow of the poem, but don't forget, that rhyming isn't always necessary in a poem. Sometimes rhyming can ruin a poem because the writer sometimes focuses so ...

This was a great poem, but I didn't quite feel any depth from your poem though Try exaggerating some words, so you can really reach out to the reader more ...

This was a great poem :D This poem really reached out to me, your word choice was exquisite There wasn't much to correct, so a very good job :) -sachipachi1

Your poem was a bit confusing, but I somewhat captured the idea of your poem. Even though some great poems are built from confusion, it wouldn't hurt if you pointed ...