ryanmakenna

Thanks so much! Wordiness is another thing I've been working on, so it'll improve in the future :) I'm glad to know that my fight scene wasn't snappy enough, because ...

Thank you for the review! I actually have been going through and revising the accent since I had gotten the suggestion from a few other people irl, so you aren't ...

Thank you sooo much for your awesome reviews! It is so appreciated. I'll be posting another chapter or two today; I've been on vacation for the past week, hence my ...

Thanks again, Saen! You're so encouraging. I had a great AP English teacher back in HS who was a literal grammar nazi, so it kind of just stuck with me ...

Thanks Saen! I really appreciate your feedback. It's nice to know that all my hard work in creating my characters has really paid off :D I have an outline written ...

Thank you! Awesome--I'll add it to my final version! :D

I went ahead and added a bit more context for the smuggler's hole bit, so if you could let me know if that sounds better/makes more sense, that would be ...

Thank you so much! I appreciate the nit-picks, it really helps me know what particular sentences need to be re-worked. Also, my original formatting does have Aaron's thoughts in italics--this ...

Thanks! I'll keep doing that then. I've posted the next chapter (in two segments!) if you're interested :)

Thank you, I will keep it as is for now then. Good to know that you still liked it even though it was a challenging read at first!

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked my introduction of Glauceik, and my word choice again. Thank you for the review!!

Thank you, and yes, I am setting it up for alternating views. Technically, these two chapters are just one chapter in my original formatting, but I worried that no one ...

Oh, I am so sorry it's difficult to read...I try and write for an older audience, so that's why I use more complicated grammatical structure for my sentences and a ...

Thank you so much for this review! I am so thrilled that you enjoyed it, and really glad to hear that it didn't bore you at all (haha I always ...

Have a good hiatus! I hope further reviews I do for you are beneficial for when you get in to making those revisions.