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I really liked your story! It was detailed, informative, and emotional. I liked your use of showing not telling throughout the whole story it made it even better. Only one ...

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I liked your conflict because it made me want to read your story. I also liked your title because it was simple and cool. You had good grammar and also ...

I liked your conflict because it made me want to read your story. You had good grammar and also great spelling. /i wonder if you could have had more showing ...