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Hi Bryce. I thought your story was very fast paced so it was a little hard to understand. Why would he disrespect people just because his brother was mean to ...

Hi Camo. Nice story it was really cool and informative, which made it really cool.I liked your use of showing not telling throughout the whole story it made it even ...

I liked that you use a lot of showing not telling because it added a nice touch to the story. Also it was nice to have a happy ending in ...

I really liked your use of showing not telling through out your story. However in the beginning it was a little hard for me to understand what was going on. ...