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Again, very good. Just as I've come to expect! It was pretty short compared to the rest of your work so far, but I suppose that's just due to it ...

What? Seriously, what? I get that the story is meant to be a joke, with Vikas saying the punchline at the end, but it was seriously hard to read. The ...

Hmmm, I'm not too sure what to think of this, to be honest with you. I just feel like the plot was a bit too predictable, and that very little ...

This was awesome. There really isn't anything I can advise you to improve on, and I only found a single typo, and that's honestly just a matter of preference. The ...

This was great! I really enjoyed reading it, and was drawn into the story as I got further through it. However, there are a few spelling and grammatical typos that ...

I'm, uh. I'm going to nit-pick this. And I'm going to be harsh. Sorry. " Romeo , tall and bold, can I , shall I be yours?" Lilac asked . ...

Before I start, know that I am very harsh, and I can't help being sarcastic. Honestly, I struggled to read this. You have no trouble with grammar or spelling, but, ...

Time for some shred ripping! "A hair salon helped people to look better by removing something old and worn out; a Memory Removal Clinic helped people to feel better by ...

Well. This was rather peculiar. I honestly don't know what to say to this. It's either so good that it's beyond my comprehension, or it just doesn't...something. I'll do what ...

I really enjoyed reading this. It's short enough to enrapture the reader and keep you from losing interest, but at the same time it's long enough to perfectly capture exactly ...

Much better! Honestly, it's like a different person has written this, it's that much of an improvement. There are really only a few things I can pick on, and to ...

This was awsome! I really got drawn into it, and I want to read MOOAAAR!!!! You seriously have to write an entire book of this. I mean, next to nothing ...

Okay. Well, I couldn't find any grammatical or spelling errors (except for where Needew turned on his HUD and you said that some of the information 'were' redundant) so kudos, ...

It's disturbing and made me feel slightly ill, but I get the impression that thats what you were aiming for. If so, well done! Your use of description was excellent, ...

I liked it! I couldn't find anything that Priceless didn't mention that needs fixed, and I especially enjoyed how you captured what people who are like that act. It made ...