retrodisco666

I am here as requested :D Well I would like to say I liked it but then doubt creeps on the edge of my mind. Aliens are not my favourite ...

My mouth fell . Did those words just leave his lips? In the next line I would put what had been said and make it dramatic so the reader goes ...

Non-fiction? It sounds like a story, either way I loved it. It was beautifully written. You didn't need lots of over description it was just the basics really but that ...

Hello! Now don't take this the wrong way, but I couldn't really find a point to it. . . I mean I get the piece. I get the death part. ...

Hey, If I was to sum this poem up in one word it would be . . . amazing. I really liked the way you wrote it, how it swapped ...

Hey, I defently see your problem. My only trouble is I can't put my finger on what it is that annoys me exactly. . . I think it may be ...

Hello! This is not terrible by any strech of the imagination, yet it is not perfect either, but you know this. If you were to elaborate and make this inot ...

Hey, Well erm, well um, well basically I loved it. It was very descriptive, very fast pacing, very "out there." You mad eme smile in places, you made me think. ...

Hello, I am presumming this is part of a novel,yes? I have no read any of the toher chapters of the story but I do not think I need to. ...

Hello, Positive points: *Very good imagery in places *Good Length *Was readable Negative pointes: *Very genric. The thing about the poem was that ti was very generic. There is nothing ...

Hello there, As a poem goes it is quite good, however some constistancy in the stanza lenght would be good I feel, however, for it's context I am not to ...

Hey, I'm going to marry F.R.E.D. He may be god. This is actually a really good poem which is the best part of it. It was very funny and I ...

Me again! I am glad you put this is an old poem, or I would have presumed you're slipping. My main problem was punctuation, I know I am not perfect ...

Hey, This was good, but I don't see how it linked back to your title, if I am being honest. The structure also annoyed me. I don't think it looks ...

Hey, This was, well, astounding. It was so emotion packed, it was gripping. Your reference to the sirens was absolutely superb. I think I will go through this bit by ...