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I like the imagary you used, it really painted a clear picture for me. However, I did feel that the second verse was a little, how should I put it, ...

Oh, okay that makes sense thanks.

Thansk to all of you for your imput! This story is currently going through a major overhall and I'll post it again when it's ready. ~®®§

A fun nonsense poem, it reminds me of poems I've read in children's literature magazines like Ladybug and Spider. On a minor note nat should be gnat. Other than that ...

Good as a piece of humorous fiction, not good as a superhero parody. So as long as you don't tell people that it is supposed to be a superhero story ...

While I don't neccessarily agree with this poem's message, I did enjoy the feeling that the poem gives and loved how the beginning captured a bunch of abstract ideas and ...