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This is so darling. :) Short but sweet, which is something I really admire! Being able to keep a story compact but still emotional and well-structured is such an awesome ...

Yeah, now that I look over it again she seems drunk or something, haha! She's actually a nurse who works overnight shifts, so sometimes she's kinda falling asleep as she ...

Thank you for your feedback! I'm so glad you like Ashton! You have a point with both your criticisms, and thank you for bringing my attention to them! My main ...

I'm glad you noticed the action fix! I kept your earlier review in mind when I was writing/editing. So glad it helped! And yes, Lily's mom is tired... she's a ...

Wow, I can't believe that! I never thought anyone would care this much about my little story, haha! That really means a lot. To be honest, I got so busy ...

Thank you very much! I agree with everything you said, thank you for pointing it out to me! I'll be sure to keep that in mind when I edit. Exposition ...

Thank you so much for the feedback!! Ashton taking initiative/control is actually what the plot and conflict is going to end up focusing on! This is just setup, but when ...

What you said about Ashton getting more active and connecting is exactly what I%u2019m going for!! But then he goes a little too far... but no spoilers, haha! I%u2019m glad ...

Thank you so much for this really sweet review! I%u2019m actually planning on adding more dialogue as I go. I wanted to start with this vague, winding narrative style that ...

Oh, Shawshank Redemption? I could see the wall symbolism lining up... Ashton isn%u2019t in prison though, haha! Well to be fair he is in high school, which isn%u2019t far off... ...

Thank you so much for your feedback! It%u2019s really valuable to me, and I%u2019ll keep it in mind as I edit. Could you tell me what movie it reminds you ...

Haha, it%u2019s okay! And yep, his name is Ashton! The writing is actually heavy on purpose, I%u2019m planning on introducing more and more dialogue and %u201Ctraditional narrative%u201D style as I ...

Oh wow, I didn%u2019t know that! I%u2019m so sorry!